Some people believe that there should be fixed punishment for each type of crime. Others, however argue that the circumstances of an individual crime and the motivation for committing it should be taken into account when deciding on the punishment. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

In recent times, the rate of criminal activities
have risen
Suggestion
has risen
dramatically,
therefore
, most people think; for every offence committed, a consequence should be
alloted
given as a task
allotted
allowed
elated
. Whereas, other individuals believe that, events surrounding every criminal action ought to be considered before passing judgement on offenders. In my opinion, examining the reasons behind the
criminal's
Suggestion
criminal
action is important. Analysis of both sides will be established in
this
essay. On the one hand, having a specific kind of
penality
the act of punishing
penalty
for a wrong which was done, is a fair means of penalising evil deeds.
This
is because it
elimintes
terminate, end, or take out
eliminates
illuminates
every form of bias.
For instance
, granting a milder form of punishment to a man because he is younger than his counterparts -which is a form of inequity- will not be allowed to happen in
this
situation because equity will prevail while serving sentences to the suspects.
On the other hand
, considering
occurences
come to pass
occurs
occurrences
around the committed crime is paramount, due to the fact that, allegations.
sometimes
Suggestion
Sometimes
does not seem to be as alleged.
Hence
, proper investigation is,
therefore
, necessary before prosecuting a criminal.
Consequently
, condemning people wrongly will be avoided,
For instance
, a seventy year old man was
juast
and nothing more
just
discharged and
acquitted having
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acquitted, having
spent
fify
being ten more than forty
fifty
years in jail for an offence which could have only required payment for damages caused. In conclusion, even though punishments should be allocated to each offence, It is even more important that detailed investigation be carried out, and considering
occurence
an event that happens
occurrence
surrounding the
offense
a lack of politeness; a failure to show regard for others; wounding the feelings or others
offence
.
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