It has been noted that many people who had a big impact on the world gave themselves completely to their work and did not bother with the idea of “work-life balance”. To what extent should people try to have a good work-life balance? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Nowadays, seems to be an increasingly widespread concern
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(of quantities) imprecise but fairly close to correct
about
the work-life balance. Many people do not think
aboult
(of quantities) imprecise but fairly close to correct
about
to have a quality time with friends and family,
this
"
achivers
a person with a record of successes
achievers
" always have something to chase, the aims are the priority
on
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in
of
their lives. But we should
meditade
reflect deeply on a subject
meditate
about our fast passage on the earth. The questions that we should do are. Are we taking something with us after we pass-away? Do our achievements make us
to feel
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feel
happier in a long term? Many scientists stand that our current
stile
how something is done or how it happens
style
of life that impose on us a standard of "success". But, the problem is that
this
success
do not bring
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does not bring
us the happiness that we want,
this
social standards
make
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makes
us work more for buy things that will not fill us in a long term.
Contrary
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The contrary
of that, the world seems to "slave" us with the culture of
having
any place of complete bliss and delight and peace
heaven
, and not being. I think that it is important to have some time to achieve something
that is
necessary for the future, like "
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(American football) a play in which a player attempts to carry the ball through or past the opposing team
running
faster" during a short period of time, for buy a house for
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example, or
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to study in the university for a better
profission
the body of people in a learned occupation
profession
professional
, these are instances that will be used as
a
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an
investment to have a better
live
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life
in the future.
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this
style of life should not be
longer
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long
enouth
as much as necessary
enough
to bring stress and make the life harder in a long term. All in all, people should to have a good balance of work-
live
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life
balance, and
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pass time in a specific way
spend
spent
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to
them a better future.
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