It is inevitable that traditional cultures will be lost as technology develops.  Technology and tradition are incompatible. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this view?

    Tradition is a crucial part of the social sphere of mankind, as different cultures pride themselves in a variety of attributes. Some are of the school of thought that traditional values will become obsolete because of modernization, and are
therefore
incompatible. I completely disagree with the notion that our traditional ways of life and beliefs cannot coexist with traditional cultures.     
To begin
with, our heritages remain a vital part of our existence and technological advancements have
affords
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afforded
us the opportunity to preserve and appreciate our different cultures.
Furthermore
, it has been used recently to discover long lost treasures, scripts, as well as
artifacts
a man-made object taken as a whole
artefacts
.
In addition
, it has even shed  light on
obstacles
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the obstacles
that can lead to the eradication of certain parts of our heritage. People can save materials
partaining
be relevant to
pertaining
pertinent
to their
ethinicities
an ethnic quality or affiliation resulting from racial or cultural ties
ethnicities
on the internet  where they can be stored forever.
For instance
, during an archaeological discovery in the Amazon jungle, in 2015,
technology
was used to decipher and translate some ancient texts, which led us to understand that the long lost ways of food
preservatiom
the activity of protecting something from loss or danger
preservation
was what their ancestors used to eradicate some illnesses.    
Secondly
, with the world becoming a global village, a lot of
inter-racial
between races
interracial
marriages are
occuring
come to pass
occurring
. More and more ethnicities and cultures are mixing up. The advent of
technology
has made it possible for individuals to stay
im
to or toward the inside of
in
I'm
touch with their traditional rites from anywhere in the diaspora.
Also
, there has been an increase in the bridging of the knowledge gap that
separares
act as a barrier between; stand between
separates
separated
us, due to the fact that science and
technology
has made belief systems more comprehensible.
For example
, I for one, have been able to perform and partake in
sone
quantifier; used with either mass nouns or plural count nouns to indicate an unspecified number or quantity
some
one
cultural rites via social media platforms, over the years, as I have not been to my
nativeland
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native land
in over five years.      In conclusion, some people still believe that our traditions and
technology
cannot exist in the same world. I completely
this
agree
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agrees
with the thought process that cultural values
amd
in order to; used instead of "to", especially after try, come, go
and
technology
do not mix, because
technology
has invariably saved
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invariably saves
many cultures from extinction and made us more tolerable of ourselves.
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