Today more people are overweight than ever before. What in your opinion are the primary causes of this? What are the main effects of this epidemic?

Recent days, there
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In recent days, there
is a faster growth of weight in many people than that of the olden days due to multiple reasons, resulting in the obesity. Over weight causes many health disorders, which has to be taken care of, in the initial stages of identifying
such
development, rather than ignoring. Adversely,
such
ignorance leads to fatal diseases, stops functioning of many main parts of the body;
Also
the body won't respond to medicines in later conditions as it badly gets effected by that time.
Firstly
, the foremost reason for obesity is due to unhealthy food consumption like,
oily
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oil
recipes, long time refrigerated, old baked breads, etc. These types of meals are occupied by bacteria and fungi not only from outside but
also
from the deep inside of the material, that which, once consumed, spoils the belly accruing the problem of Acidity. Many-a-times, at a certain stage, the stomach
haults
be the source of pain
hurts
accepting the food
any more
at the present or from now on; usually used with a negative
anymore
, in contrary to
it's
of a thing, of it; possessive form of "it"
its
capacity as it has already accumulated the worst.
Secondly
, it happens because of
over loads
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the overloads
overloads
of the quantity with distinct materials
such
as spices, meat oriented, and so on. Though, there are
lot
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lots
of
protiens
any of a large group of nitrogenous organic compounds that are essential constituents of living cells; consist of polymers of amino acids; essential in the diet of animals for growth and for repair of tissues; can be obtained from meat and eggs and milk and legumes
proteins
protons
preteens
supplied to the physic of a human being through meat, but on the flip side,
over whelming
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the overwhelming
overwhelming
is again a big offence of gaining weight very rapidly. Unfortunately, at times, few cultures are framed in
such
a way that, eating of non-vegetarian is compulsory, or it is believed that crossing of the ancestral customs, across major places of the World. Perhaps, no one is aware of the resultant conditions of the body or mind, which
effects
have an effect upon
affects
very badly with gigantic fatal blockages.
Exemplarily
, a disease like Gastro Enterology begins with a tiny gastric problem, creating indigestion, but the impact penetrates deeply into the blood and muscles of the skeleton, leading to many other imbalances. Resultants can be Thyroids, Throat Cancer, Blood Cancer, Liver issues, Kidney transplantations, and many more, which are majorly important for a human life to survive. Even Heart ceases functioning at a certain level, closes
it's
of a thing, of it; possessive form of "it"
its
walves
one of a series of ridges that moves across the surface of a liquid (especially across a large body of water)
waves
wolves
, paving way to Heart attacks, Brain
hammarages
the flow of blood from a ruptured blood vessel
haemorrhages
, occur bifurcating the functionality of
main organs
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the main organs
,
finally
, ending of the life.
Therefore
, conclusively, as aptly said, "Prevention is better than cure", it is always good to take precautions
,
Accept space
,
making some self-restrictions, finding
path
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the path
a path
towards healthy survival for a quite long time
happily
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happiness
.
Submitted by Mrs. Sumira Vempati on

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