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Nowadays governments are investing more in public transport such as buses and trains rather than in building new roads. What are the reasons for this? Is this a positive or negative development?

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Currently, the
government
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 is focusing and spending much more in development of public transports
such
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 as trains and buses. There are
couple
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a couple
 of reasons behind
this
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 action taken by the
government
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;
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, to make travel
easy
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easier
 by providing multiple options and to overcome the extreme pollution causing health issues these days. I believe it is really a positive development in terms of raising funds by means of fare earned from passengers and utilise in other areas for general public only. In today's world, the
transportation
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 is one of the major problem which has made an adverse effect on people residing in the country.
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, on daily basis, there are lots of accidents news are getting popular, specifically due to private vehicles.
This
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 could have been tackled, if the
government
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 provides various options of
transportation
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 to public.
Secondly
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, the population is growing day by day,
hence
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 the
transportation
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 facilities should be grown simultaneously to make citizens' life easier. Apart from
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, spending more in
transportation
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 leads to more return in terms of fare received,
hence
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 the
government
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 can utilise raised funds by means of fare for
further
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 development of roads, which needs extra cost. Utilising funds in
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is
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are
 definitely an optimistic approach to make general public happy by making them
availability
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the availability
 of plenty of options of
transportation
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 due to which it would be easy for people who suffers a lot, specially who
can not
can not
cannot
 afford their own vehicles. Commutation is really a big challenge people are facing,
therefore
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 the
government
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 needs additional supervision to make
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transportation
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transporting
 improvised. If the
government
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 takes proper measure in
this
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 section, the transition of developing into developed countries will not be far apart.
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