Some people fail in school, but end up being successful in life. Why do you think that is the case? What is the most important thing to succeed in life.

Nowadays, education has become
irreplaceable part
Suggestion
an irreplaceable part
in the
life
of the younger generation because many people believe that the youth are
bound fail
Suggestion
bound to fail
without a college degree. Contrary to the common belief, some folks end up being successful in
life
, even after failing in the academics. One of the main reasons for
this
case is, a child's subject of interest could be something else, like acting and sports. If a kid is planning to become an athlete or an actor, forcing him or her
to study
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study
will not
yeild
be the cause or source of
yield
the desired results in either
scenarios
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scenario
. There are numbers of celebrities on the planet that proved, failing in studies is not the end of the road.
For example
,
Accept space
,
The cricket
super star
someone who is dazzlingly skilled in any field
superstar
Sachin Tendulkar did not even complete the school and yet he is one of the most successful and the richest sports persons in the country. The two most important criteria to have a great career and to be in the
life
are the skills and
hardwork
Suggestion
hard work
. Anyone who works hard and do best
in
Suggestion
at
what they love, success will be always in the
reach
any competition
race
and it
also
proves that the success in academia is not the golden rule for to achieve a successful
life
. Steve jobs is greatest tech
mughals
Suggestion
Mughals
that
world
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the world
has ever seen, he did not graduate and yet, he changed the way the humans communicated in the 21st century. His skills and the
atitude
a complex mental state involving beliefs and feelings and values and dispositions to act in certain ways
attitude
attitudes
altitude
towards achieving the target made all the difference in his
life
. To conclude, schooling is important for the foundation, but it is not the only path to the happy and great
life
.
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