In some countries the average weight of people is increasing and their levels of health and fitness are decreasing What do you think are the caises of these problems and what measures could be taken to solve them? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience?

Everyone in the world desires a healthy
life
, doesn't he? There are several countries where not only the typical body weight of individuals
are growing but
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is growing, but
is growing but
also
the quality of health and wealth are going downward. Indeed I have so many
logic
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logics
to describe the reasons behind these unexpected matters as well as some recommendations to get rid of these.
Although
there are many reasons for getting overweight, food habit is one of the major issues. While a person is desiring a healthy
life
, he cannot control himself from eating fast foods, junk foods, contains a lot of
fats so,
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fats, so
people get overweight and become fatter soon.
However
, there is another cause is not doing hard work or single exercise in a day because of the habitation of laziness. To give up these problems for a
nation it
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nation, it
is the
first
step that to aware people about their future hard role. As soon as people get information about
effects
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the effects
and solution they might be careful about to
led
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lead
a routine wise
life
to have fitness and health.
Although
there is none who can avoid
processing
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processed
foods, they can take
also
nutritious foods (for instant vegetables, fruits, fishes,
etc
continuing in the same way
etc.
) beside of junk foods.
Moreover
, they might maintain a daily exercise in the
morning which
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morning, which
can help to reduce their extra fats. To sum
up there
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up, there
are many possibilities to
lost
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lose
a happy
life
with overweight and losing
fitness but
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fitness, but
the solution is too simple
that is
only a regular exercise and ideal food habits can be the big solutions against those problems.
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