Money cannot buy happiness it is often claim but with money you can buy most of thing that are necessary for happiness good food accommodation entertainment travel quality health etc no wonder most people want to make as money as possible do you agree or disagree

This
modern day, everybody run for
money
at morning to night because it is one of
thing
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the thing
which is
fulfill
completed to perfection
fulfilled
fulfil
their needs.
although
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Although
many people say that by
money
we cannot buy
happiness
, we can buy things which
are depend
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depend
on the
money
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money, such
such
as
quality
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the quality
of Healthcare food and
entertainment etc
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entertainment, etc.
entertainment etc.
I totally agree with
this
statement to
large extent
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a large extent
for
some
one or some or every or all without specification
any
reason all the argument ensuring in
further
paragraph.
to
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To
begin with, every person
of
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on
the earth
want
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wants
to keep
happiness
in their life. So people can try to
money
because all the things like quality Lifestyle, enjoyable trip and sufficient
medicare
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Medicare
which are achieved by
money
.
However everyone
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However, everyone
has no same thinking and each
people
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person
can find
happiness
from different kind of source someone has like to watch
movie
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movies
a movie
and
other
any of various alternatives; some other
another
have to go for long drive and
enjoy but
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enjoy, but
most of people who have enough
money
and time have
go
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gone
for International Tour with family. Nowadays, medical Centre
are
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is
too expensive and if you want to better and Secure
treatment
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treatment, then
then
you have to go reputed hospital, which is the highly need
money
so people have to ear much
money
.
On the contrary
side, sometime people Run for earn more and more
money
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money, therefore
therefore
they have busy with their work and cannot enjoy the
happiness
of life. While
people which
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people, which
is not economic economic wealth can find entertainment in the life, rich people cannot even they have everything which they want. To conclude, it is true that
happiness
cannot buy from
money but
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the money, but
the money but
via
money
, we can buy all things which are based on
happiness
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Material wealth
  • Financial security
  • Life satisfaction
  • Quality of life
  • Consumerism
  • Affluence
  • Wealth accumulation
  • Prosperity
  • Economic strata
  • Experiential purchases
  • Philanthropy
  • Intrinsic values
  • Extrinsic motivation
  • Subjective well-being
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