Nowadays many countries have very cosmopolitan cities with people from all over the world. How can the government ensure that all these people can live together harmoniously? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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In recent years, some of the largest cities in the world have grown even more. With increasing population, the cultural differences increase as well. Growing cities have better job opportunities, which attract talented people from all over the world. Along with the growth, comes responsibilities. The government needs to make sure all of these people can accept each other and live peacefully.

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and foremost, the ruling body should increase the cultural

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among people of these cities.

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can be achieved via multiple different options.

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, including the information about different cultures in schools, would help children accept and befriend other kids from different cultures. Arranging community activities and even providing materials to read and explore different race, ethnicity etc.,

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public libraries, can be an option. All of these activities bring general

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in population about different countries, their traditions etc.

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, cultural difference is a

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a habitual or characteristic mental attitude that determines how you will interpret and respond to situations

mindset

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. If the law can control certain factors that threaten or disrespect these differences, that can help tremendously.

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, accepting people's natural language, dialect, accent and faith are really important factors. Sometimes, prejudices and past bitter experiences give birth to issues like racism, discrimination and even bigger crimes that happens

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of these smaller factors. It can be easily avoided if

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the government

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Also controlling

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negative media coverage that focuses on

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a certain race

, ethnicity or faith can go

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a long way

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, because of negative news and publicity, one of the common prejudice, that exists today, is against the African-American community. Labelling them as criminals in general, creates a culture, which they don't want to be part of. In summary, bringing

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with different available mediums and protecting and treating people equally, regardless of their background, can be the key achievement, in

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earnest and conscientious activity intended to do or accomplish something

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to create

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a harmonious living environment

into metropolitan areas.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

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Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

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Topic Vocabulary:

cosmopolitan
inclusive policies
cultural exchange
integration
community centers
anti-discrimination
awareness campaigns
support systems
diversity
equal opportunities

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Nowadays many countries have very cosmopolitan cities with people from all over the world. How can the government ensure that all these people can live together harmoniously? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Include an introduction and conclusion

The internet has transformed the way information is shared and consumed, but it has also created problems that did not exist before. What are the most serious problems associated with the internet and what solutions can you suggest?

In some countries university students live at home with their family while they study, whereas in other countries students attend university in another city. Do you think the benefits of living away from home during university outweigh the disadvantages?

Research shows that some activities are good for health and others are bad.Despite knowing that millions of people engage in unhealthy activites. What is the cause of this? What can be done?

News editors decide what to broadcast on Television and what to write in newspapers. What factors influence those decisions? Do you think we become used to bad news? Should more good news be reported?

2.Many parents in Vietnam invest heavily into their child’s education hoping for the best. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?