Nowadays many countries have very cosmopolitan cities with people from all over the world. How can the government ensure that all these people can live together harmoniously? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

In recent years, some of the largest cities in the world have grown even more. With increasing population, the cultural differences increase as well. Growing cities have better job opportunities, which attract talented people from all over the world. Along with the growth, comes responsibilities. The government needs to make sure all of these people can accept each other and live peacefully.
First
and foremost, the ruling body should increase the cultural
awareness
among people of these cities.
This
can be achieved via multiple different options.
For example
, including the information about different cultures in schools, would help children accept and befriend other kids from different cultures. Arranging community activities and even providing materials to read and explore different race, ethnicity etc.,
into
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in
public libraries, can be an option. All of these activities bring general
awareness
in population about different countries, their traditions etc.
Moreover
, cultural difference is a
minset
a habitual or characteristic mental attitude that determines how you will interpret and respond to situations
mindset
mind-set
. If the law can control certain factors that threaten or disrespect these differences, that can help tremendously.
For example
, accepting people's natural language, dialect, accent and faith are really important factors. Sometimes, prejudices and past bitter experiences give birth to issues like racism, discrimination and even bigger crimes that happens
as a result
of these smaller factors. It can be easily avoided if
government
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the government
can bring general
awareness
.
Also controlling
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Also, controlling
negative media coverage that focuses on
certain race
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a certain race
, ethnicity or faith can go
long way
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a long way
.
For example
, because of negative news and publicity, one of the common prejudice, that exists today, is against the African-American community. Labelling them as criminals in general, creates a culture, which they don't want to be part of. In summary, bringing
awareness
with different available mediums and protecting and treating people equally, regardless of their background, can be the key achievement, in
effors
earnest and conscientious activity intended to do or accomplish something
efforts
to create
harmonious living environment
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a harmonious living environment
into metropolitan areas.
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