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Some people fail in school but end up being successful in life. Why do you think that is the case? What is the most important thing to succeed in life?

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School
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The school
 plays a vital role in the development of a person. Pupils learn numerous things and gain knowledge of different subjects.
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, some folks fail in school, but they become successful in their
life
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. The following paragraphs will discuss the reason behind it and the main initiative to get
success
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 in
life
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 as well. To initiate with, many people are talented and skilled;
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, they are not interested in school education and studies, but due to their expertise and qualifications, they achieve their desired goals.
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, Suresh Rain, an Indian cricketer failed in his 10th standard, but due to his hard
work
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 and excellent cricketing skills, he gained popularity and became the prominent face of the Indian cricket team.
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, several folks want to do out of the box activities, so they
work
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 in desirable fields in which they wish to gain
success
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;
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, they take less interest in their school studies.
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, forgetting
hard
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the hard work
work
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 with full dedication is the main feature. One can learn anything with their hard
work
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 and proper dedication towards their aim of
life
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.
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, Mark Zuckerburg C.E.O of Facebook was not perfect in technology, but he wanted to make the world closer on a single platform, so he did a lot of hard
work
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 and invented Facebook. Surprisingly, he is a college dropout. In conclusion
,
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,
success
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 in
life
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 and schooling are two different things. Masses can get
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success
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successful
 by their talent, and hard
work
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.
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, their education does not matter a lot if they have full dedication towards their future goal of
life
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.
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