It is inevitable that as technology advances, traditional cultures will be lost. It seems that we cannot have these two things together. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

In the era of globalization,
technology
has been playing a major role in transforming
live
Suggestion
lives
life
of billions of people. At the same time, many communities across the world are in a fear of losing their
culture
with the
raise
a growth in strength or number or importance
rise
of the
technology
. I completely disagree with the statement.
First
of all, I believe that even though the
technology
and the
culture
are interlinked to each other, the former one has little sway in influencing the
civilizational
attributes because the traditions and values have been integral and inseparable part of human
lives
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life
over thousands of years. Generally, humans by nature have a tendency to preserve anything
that is
old and valuable.
For example
, in India, there are hundreds of different cultures and even after rapid industrialization and scientific development over the
last
century, most of the ancient tribes and communities are still thriving and embracing their roots.
Secondly
,
technology
helps in preserving the
culture
. In fact, many ancient societies went extinct because of the inability to preserve their way of life in some form or the other. Without development in the knowledge, it wouldn’t be possible to save the ethos in the long run.
For example
, if we look at the two oldest surviving civilizations like
Indian
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the Indian
and Chinese, their entire history and
culture
were preserved and protected in the form architecture, books and art. So, in my
opinion there
Accept comma addition
opinion, there
is no need to vilify the technological achievements that humanity has made. To conclude, traditional cultures and
technology
should go hand in hand, we can’t resist the later in the fear of losing tradition.
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