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Topic:- you recently receiy a letter from a friend asking for advice about whether to go to college or to try to get a job.you think he/she should get a job. Write a letter to this friend .IN your letter •say why he/she would not enjoy going to college •explain why getting a job is a good for him/her •suggest type of job that would be suitable for him/her

#topic #receiy #friend #advice #college #job #•say #•explain #•suggest #type
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Dear John I have received your letter in which you were asking me to reply with the advice whether to go to college or try to get a
job
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,I am glad that you have expressed faith in me to suggest you something in
this
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 crucial decision so,
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accordingly
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i
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I
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 would suggest you
to
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apply
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do
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job
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the job
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 and will explain you the reason why.
firstly
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,
i
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I
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 would like to explain
you
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 the disadvantages,
i
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I
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 think you would not enjoy
to go
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going
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 college as
there
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their
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many
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are many
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 students
tend
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who tend
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 to come
for
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to
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the
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apply
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parties only not for studies.
secondly
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, college would be charging huge fees as you haven’t given their entrance exam,
hence
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 you would be wasting your time and money. On
the
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another
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other
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 hand, advantage to do
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job
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the job
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 is you would
be explore
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to
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apply
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the working environment with differently aged and experienced people
however
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buy
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by
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 earning money you would get the value of money and be
self dependent
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.
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,
i
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I
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 would like to suggest
you
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to you
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 the
job
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 options as you are assiduous with excellent communication
skill
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skills
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 it is advisable to do
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job
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a job
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 at call centres and receptions and broaden your horizon. Good luck
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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