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Logging of the rain forests is a serious problem and it may lead to the extinction of animal life and human life. To what extent to you agree of disagree?

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Each and every living being on the planet earth is dependent on the natural resources. Since the evolution of the humans, exploitation of minerals and fossil fuels has increased exponentially.
As a result
, many plant and animal
species including
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species, including
humans are
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humans, are
 staring at the extinction. I completely agree with the given statement.
First
 of all, forests play a vital role in controlling the global warming because they are responsible for keeping the carbon dioxide levels under control. If the deforestation continues without foresight, the temperature increases, sea level
raises
move upward
rises
, and
as a result
, millions of species will disappear from the face of the globe. There are
number
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a number
 of credible studies that proved, we are responsible for disturbing the ecological balance.
For example
, Tiger numbers in India are falling rapidly and there are categorized as endangered animals because they are losing their lives to the growing population.
Secondly
, losing green cover will increase the pollution levels. Many countries are already experiencing the side effects of cutting down the jungles, general public started using the air purifiers in their daily life. If reforestation does not happen and deforestation continues at the current scale, there will be dire consequences to the human lives.
For example
, in India and
china
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China
, the population explosion
lead
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leads
 to dramatic decrease in the tree cover and
as a result
, millions of people are dying because of the pollution related illnesses. To conclude, I believe, preserving thick forests and retrieving lost bio-diversity is essential for the survival of the mankind and the animal kingdom.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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