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Some people think that tourists should follow the traditional customs of the host country. Do you agree or disagree?

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I agree that, people who are visiting another
country
 should follow the
culture
 of that
country
. Some may say, Why?
This
 is because the reason for
traveling
the act of going from one place to another
travelling
 to far places, is to see new places and learn new ways of doing things. Another reason, is to avoid problems.
Firstly
, the reasons why people travel, is to see places and learn other people's
culture
. Because of that, the tourists should follow the tradition of the people who are hosting them.
This
 will bring more memorable moments.
Moreover
, the feeling of being away from home will be easily felt, making the trip more enjoyable.
For example
, at one point
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 saw tourists from USA in Swaziland, they were wearing the Swazi traditional attire.
Furthermore
, they were staying in small round huts without electricity. From their impression, it was really enjoyable.
Secondly
, some countries have taboos.
Similarly
, the visited
country
 will have its own taboos which are different from from the that of the tourists.Due to that, it is important for tourists to follow the
culture
 of the hosting people so as to avoid conflicts and problems.
For
instance it
Accept comma addition
instance, it
 is a taboo to
climba
Suggestion
climb an
climb a
 Inyanga Mountain
,
Accept space
,
 whilst wearing red clothes or shoes. In the past, people used to
disappe
get lost, as without warning or explanation
disappear
in
Suggestion
into
 the mountain because of
culture
Suggestion
cultural
 conflict.
Therefore
,
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
agreee
be in accord; be in agreement
agree
agreed
 that, the visiting people should follow the
culture
 of the
country
 they are visiting. In conclusion, I concur that, tourist must follow the local customs and
behavior
manner of acting or controlling yourself
behaviour
 of the people they have visited, in order to avoid conflicts and problems. Above all, it makes the experience
enjoable
affording satisfaction or pleasure
enjoyable
 and fun.
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