Over the past fifty years, international sports events such as the Olympic Games and world cup competitions have played an increasingly important role in our society. However, many people think such events are an enormous waste of money, time and effort. Do you agree?

Since
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For
decades, there
is
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has been
a remarkable hike in the ratio of participation in the games and the relevant competitions in the World, as they are identified as the best sources of income, despite, helps in maintaining the sound health. They do a lot of
hardwork
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hard work
along with investing the time and money for fruitful results, that which stabilizes their career path onto the skies as per their beliefs. They find immense pleasure in performing
these tasks as,
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these tasks, as
many of them are passionate towards sports, enjoying that span, forgetting the entire World. The immersion is in
such
a way that, many-a-times, they forget to have lunch and even getting back to family or home. They actively learn new techniques to overcome the drastic situations,
besides
, increasing their sporting spirit with
a
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an
enriching knowledge. Their mental and physical balances are awesome, when compared to that of normal individuals, who never prefer to play, rather are interested on other stuffs. There are enormous benefits of playing games like they increase the physical
stamena
enduring strength and energy
stamina
, through the proper consumption of food, making the mind and body balance equally.
Moreover
, it teaches how to meet tough situations intelligently, out of the experience
seeked
give a certain impression or have a certain outward aspect
seemed
from the failures, at the time of playing.
Such
people can face difficult times very easily, comes out solutions
rapidbly
with rapid movements
rapidly
, while others are striving for
long time
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a long time
.
In addition
to these, they meet
challenges
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the challenges
at ease, irrespective of the number negative perspectives, leaving them in happiness. That's why
such
players are given jobs, a
sern
ascending to a level markedly higher than the usual
soaring
serene
career, encouraging them
positively
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positive
, so that they can achieve more and more, bringing fame to the family and the society.
Also
, rewards, recognitions are provided adequately nurturing their talents, enabling them to stay in high spirits. On the flip side, they are expected to come out with unique methodologies of a problem, being ideal in
teh
definite article
the
organizations for a smooth flow of functioning.
Nevertheless
, I strongly agree that it is really a very useful investment, which shows a lot of impact on the society and on the growth of the country.
Besides
, provision of more focus based programmes and abundant resources to these people shall benefit the society, where ever they are, with the reversal of their unending positive
strenghts
the property of being physically or mentally strong
strengths
.
Submitted by Mrs. Sumira Vempati on

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