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In order to study at university students are required to pay expensive tuition fees. Not all students can afford them so some people think that university education should be free for everyone. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Fees for higher
education
 are expensive and not affordable for everyone
so according
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so, according
 to some
university
 should be free for everyone regardless of their background. In my opinion, I agree that
university
education
 ought to be free as it will greatly benefit both individuals and
society
. A good reason to abolish
university
 fees is that it gives
people whether
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people, whether
 they are rich or poor equal rights. At present, students from poor background are prevented from entering
university
 because they are unable to pay the fees.
This
 excludes a large proportion of
society
 and is discriminatory which can be avoided by getting rid of the tuition fees. Another point to consider is that having no fees at
university
 means that students will no longer have to work at the same time as studying to cover their costs.
For example
, around three quarters of all students in the UK have to work either full time or part time while studying to pay their fees. Free higher
education
 should,
therefore
, produce better results as students will able to apply themselves to their studies exclusively.
Finally
, free
university
education
 will benefit
society
 in the long run, for the simple reason that it will open up higher
education
 to a wider range of the population.
This
 will result in increasing the number of educated people.
In other words
, having a greater resource of skilled and knowledgeable professionals will bring greater rewards to
society
 as a whole.
Moreover
, it can bring more economic advantages to a country that shows itself to be prosperous and leading in various fields.
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