Some say that the standard of behaviour among children has worsened and that this is their parents' fault; others say that schools are to blame. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

People have different views about the causes of the worsening of
children
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children's
child
behaviour. In the following essay, I will discuss both sides of
this
issue as well as give my opinion. On the one hand, it is considered by some that, in contemporary societies, school do not
disciplune
a branch of knowledge
discipline
students in earnest as they were used to do.
In other words
, in the
first
half of the
last
century, the education was much more strict. Taking Italy as an example, it is reported by many writers how teachers were used to adopt corporal punishments until the late 1960.
As a result
, in order to avoid any physical or
psycological
mental or emotional as opposed to physical in nature
psychological
suffering, girls and boys were habituated to behave both in and outside the class.
On the other hand
, I would argue that parents are to blame for the deterioration of behavioural standards among young people. By way of explanation, nowadays most husbands and wives pay less attention to the way in which their pupils grow up than previous generations.
For example
, much current research shows that in the
last
few decades, having the digital era
revolutionated
change radically
revolutionized
the daily living, the time spent on parenting has dramatically decreased, whereas people indulge longer on computers and smart-phones.
Consequently
, the younger ones do not receive enough directions to become responsible members of the community. In summary, both sides seem to have some
sounds
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sound
arguments.
However
, I am of the opinion that parents are the main responsible for the worsening of the
children
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children's
child's
child
behaviour.
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