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Some people believe government should spend money on building train and subway lines to reduce traffic congestion. Others think that building more and wider roads is the better way to reduce traffic congestion. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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One of the highly controversial issues today relates to whether developing
train
Suggestion
training
 and subway lines or expanding roads have more effects
to cut
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cut
 down traffic jams. In
this
 essay, I am going to examine
this
 question from both points of view and
then
 give my own opinion on the matter. On one side of the argument there are people who argue that the benefits of public transport
such
 as train, metro considerably outweigh advantages of road widening. The main reason for believing
this
 is that public transport are cheaper and safer. It is
also
 possible to say that citizens may just pay a little money to travel by modern vehicles and these transports are driven by professional drivers so people can feel comfortable. One good illustration of
this
 is a person was
traveling
the act of going from one place to another
travelling
 by tube when he was reading
book
Suggestion
books
 or listening to
music even
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music, even
 sleeping and need not to worry about driving.
On the other hand
, it is
also
 possible to make the opposing case. It is often argued that in fact road widening help vehicles moving faster and more flexible. People often have
this
 opinion because if roads are built more and expanded larger, vehicle capacity will
increase
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increase, thus
thus
 people might not waste lots of time to wait so long. In my opinion, both arguments have their merits. On balance,
however
, I tend to believe that developing public transport
such
 as train, metro lines is the better idea to decrease traffic jams.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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