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The tables below give information about sales of Fairtrade*-labelled tea and pineapples in 2010 and 2015 in five European countries.

The tables below give information about sales of Fairtrade*-labelled tea and pineapples in 2010 and 2015 in five European countries.
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 illustrates data about the outcomes of selling Fairtrade*-labelled
tea
 and
Pineapples
 in five different European
countries
 (
France
,
Austria
,
Germany
,
Netherland
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Netherlands
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,
Norway
) in 2010 and 2015,measured
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 Euros.
Overall
,
France
 had by far the highest rate
in
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 selling
Fairtrade labelled
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tea
 in total.
while
,
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austria
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Austria
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 was significantly ahead in
pineapples
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sales
.the least amount of
sales
 was in
Norway
 ( Fairtrade labelled
tea
)and
Germany
(
pineapples
). In terms of Fairtrade labelled
tea
,In 2010,
Austria
 was the first in selling
this
 product
4
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million euros .Which, is twice as many
sales
 as
Netherland
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Netherlands
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.A slight
differance
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difference
 had been found between
France
 and
Germany
 with
Gremany
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Germany
 slightly forward just less than 500,000.in 2015,
France
 had the lead with 21 million Euros.
While
 other
countries
 had a gradual increase in
sales
.
On the other hand
 ,
Austria
 had
in
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impressive progress in
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pineapple
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pineapples
sales
 the rate has dramatically increased in 2015
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 it was
in
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 2010 (48 and 16 respectively).in 2015, most
of
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the
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countries
 has a steady growth in
sales
 of
pineapples
 exapit,
Germany
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 and
Norway
. In conclusion.
While
 other
countries
 had rose
there
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sales
 in 2015
comperd
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compared
 to that in 2010 in both products.
Germany
 and
Norway
 data showed a
dropp
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drop
 in the
sales
 rate .
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Vocabulary: Replace the words tea, pineapples, countries, france, austria, germany, norway, sales with synonyms.
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