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now a days some people think that public libraries are not necessary while other disagree.discuss both the views and give your own opinions and examples

Libraries are the creek of knowledge which fascinates the
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since the digital era is prevailing some people oppose that libraries are not compulsory.In my opinion,
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state funded
 libraries certainly have become less important than they used to be;
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, I cannot support the argument that they are no longer important
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the
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 technology has made the public libraries less imperative, The primary reason behind
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is, information
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 can be easily accessed on
internet
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the internet
 in a fraction of
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 without carrying heavy voluminous books
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whereas in library people have to search a number of books thoroughly on a Particular topic.
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Moreover, travel
 to an
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Athenaeum
 in a chock full roads is being time consuming and exhausting, for an instance if a person desires to seek an economic book
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he will prefer to search
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 sites like google, Wikipedia,
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Pubmed
 and Oxford Dictionary
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Needless to say people who have constant access to
internet
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the internet
 no longer visit to
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the Athenaeum
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public libraries still serve some valuable purpose
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beyond doubt the online facts are new and available on single click
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 libraries have
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an impressive collection
 of old manuscripts which are not available online
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,
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 found online can be unreliable or false because there is no one to check the veracity of data posted online. For
this
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 reason, libraries are still the best source of
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 for research scholars. Libraries
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 provide a quiet environment where students can read without facing any distractions. In conclusion, there is no denying the fact that public libraries is becoming tedious while technology has developed and has granted humans opportunities to get access to
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 quickly.Even so, they are still needed because
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 stored in a library
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has been
is being
 always reliable or accurate and it is irrefutable that the concentrating environment is only available at libraries.

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