Some think the best way to motivate and encourage people to work hard is to pay them based on how much they produce and sell. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

One of the responsibilities of a manager is to motivate their employees to increase their
performance
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Performance
.
However
, I strongly disagree that basing their salaries on
their rates of
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their rates
production
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Production
and sales would be the most effective method.
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37 words) The
performance
in many cases cannot simply be quantified in terms of sales or
production
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Production
. A teacher’s job,
for example
, is to teach classes, assess homework, and
provide
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Provide
students with feedback, none of which involves producing or selling any goods. In
this
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This
case, it is the
performance
of her students and their levels of satisfaction with
aspects
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Aspects
of her
performance
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performance, such
such
as rapport or punctuality that decide how successful he
has
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Has
been.
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Furthermore
, the
performance
of many workers is greatly affected by external factors
beyond
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Beyond
their control. The state of the economy, unexpected political developments, and
extreme
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Extreme
weather conditions can all have significant impacts on how much a worker can
sell
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Sell
or produce. A hurricane,
for example
, can easily devastate a farm and all its produce
without
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Without
its workers being responsible for any of the damages or the ensuing drop in
production
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Production
rates. Basing wages on sales or
production
rates would actually
demotivate
workers
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Workers
in
such
cases.
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85 words) Some may argue that it is difficult to assess anything other than a worker’s output,
making
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Making
any other form of
appraisal less
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appraisal, less
effective.
However
, managers these days have
tools
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Tools
such
as questionnaires and Customer Relations Management platforms that allow
them
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Them
to form a relatively clear picture of a worker’s overall
performance
.
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85 words) In conclusion, I think deciding how much an employee should earn based solely on their
sales
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Sales
or
production
figures would be both impossible and unfair in most, if not all, cases.
Instead
, employers should look at a more diverse set of
performance
indicators, including customer satisfaction and punctuality.
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