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Some people feel that it is always wrong to keep animals in captivity, for instance in zoos. Other people say that there are benefits for the animals and for humans. Discuss both sides of this debate, and give your personal view.

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Zoos
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 continue to be controversial, even now that they have evolved into ‘animal parks’ or similar facilities. Most people love
animals
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, and there are strong views on both sides, which I will discuss now. People opposed to
zoos
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 highlight the unnatural way in which
animals
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 live in
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 places. For example, captive
animals
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 do not need to hunt or raise offspring, and
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 means that they are not living as nature intended.
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, the anti-zoo lobby
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 out that
animals
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 probably suffer mentally when kept in captivity, even if their surroundings are spacious and similar to
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 natural
habitat
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. Symptoms of mental issues range from repetitive behaviour to eating disorders, and these are often seen in captive
animals
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.
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, it is often said that
zoos
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 add little to animal conservation, which is better served by preserving their
habitat
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.
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, those who support
zoos
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 say that in most cases they offer a secure and peaceful setting for
animals
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,
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 wildlife parks or reserves. They add that in many cases, the
animals
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 would suffer from loss of
habitat
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 or poaching in the wild, and in
captivity
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 they are at least safe and able to breed successfully.
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, zoo enthusiasts feel that
zoos
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 and animal parks are part of an integrated system of protecting
animals
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, involving
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 protection, breeding programmes and disease control.
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 all helps to safeguard endangered species and
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 preserve the global ecosystem for the future benefit of all life forms.
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, I feel that
zoos
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 provide a valuable service to society and the animal world, as they help to protect many species.
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 outweighs their possible disadvantages, as long as they are properly staffed and maintained.
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Structure your answers in logical paragraphs

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A strong argument essay structure can be split up into 4 paragraphs, each containing 4 sentences (except the conclusion paragraph, which only contains 3 sentences).

Stick to this essay structure:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

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