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An increasing number of developing countries are expanding their tourist business. Why do you think it is the case? And do you think it is positive change?

Tourism
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 plays a vital role in most of the
country
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’s
economy
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 due to
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 reason many developing countries
are focusing
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are focused
 on their tourist
business
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. The financial aspects really matter when the
business
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such
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 as
tourism
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 contributing a huge part towards the national
economy
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. In my opinion, the
tourism
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business
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 is a beneficial share for any
country
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. The majority of developing countries are concentrating on their
tourism
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 in order to attract more people all around the globe. There are certain positive points which pay its major part to the
economy
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,
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 result in financial stability to local
business
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 and its development.
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 to
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, the global appearance really matters to showcase the development of any
country
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.
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, UAE one of the wealthiest countries in the world enriched due to its oil and gas reserves but, their
tourism
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business
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 now contributes approximately 70% towards their
economy
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.
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 expounds clearly why
tourism
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 is so important to every
country
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.
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 to
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, every
country
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 has been built on the basis of its cultural values and ethics. Tourists get attracted and travel all across the world to experience different traditions and languages. Owing to
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 reason, the governments will get more aware and they will take corrective steps in order to preserve their ancient monuments which reflect their true culture. The
tourism
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 brings the new employment opportunities, economic stabilization to local communities and the platform to showcase their culture to the world. To conclude, in my opinion, definitely, it’s an optimistic revolution in terms of constructive measures towards
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tourism which
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tourism, which
 will boost most of the
country
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’s
economy
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. Local communities and governments will get benefits in order to balance their general public life financially with the global appearance.  

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