Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

Few people
thinks
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think
it is always good to accept the fate and shows reluctance to change while many people assess the situation and improve their shortcomings. The
first
option is good at some situation, but, why many people prefer the latter option, will be
discuss
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discussed
in
further
paragraphs. In today’s world the technology is at epitome provided that there are serious consequences
such
as unsatisfactory job and irregularities in financial budget. The machines are replacing the jobs of human as well as lack of skills causes to take employment in
different field
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different fields
a different field
,
thus
, results in less fulfilment at work.
For instance
jack
ma
objective form of "I"
me
the famous leader of Chinese conglomerate worked as tourist guide,
waiter
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waited
and at
last
teacher
also
, but, he survived his tough days and now he is the chairman of
company
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the company
a company
.
Moreover
,
this
hard
times
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time
act as catalyst for improving oneself as
wise person
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a wise person
wise people
.
However
, there are some persons who solely depend on fate to improve their situations. There are several factors
such
as
negative environment
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a negative environment
around them as well as lack of self-confidence to accept change. But, sometimes it is better
for
example my
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example, my
friend Mario who purchased the share of tech company called apple and never sold them despite of ups and downs.
This
is similar to catch
diamond
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the diamond
a diamond
in
trash
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the trash
.
Although
, luck does play an important
role but
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role, but
we should always strive
for
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to
hard work to improve our situations. In my opinion, there are several factors which
affects
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affect
our life and results in bad situation, but, we should not lose hope and take a positive approach by accepting it and move forward.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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