SOME PEOPLE PREFER TO PROVIDE HELP AND SUPPORT DIRECTLY TO THOSE IN NEED.OTHERS HOWEVER PREFER TO GIVE MONEY TO NATIONAL AND INTERNATIONAL CHARITABLE ORGANIZATIONS. DISCUSS BOTH VIEWS AND GIVE YOUR OPINION.

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While some individuals choose to give help and

support

personally to the needy

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others would rather offer

money

to national and international charitable organizations.

Although

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giving

money

in person to those who need them ensures that the monies are used for its purpose

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charitable organizations guarantee fair and equitable distribution of funds for needy people and in my opinion

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this

is the best method of rendering help. One the one hand

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offering help directly to those in need ensures that these funds

gets

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get

to the individual in due time.

This

is because it boycotts the barrage of paperwork associated with

release

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the release

of funds in charitable organizations.

Furthermore

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it prevents incidences of embezzlement of

money

and corruption because there is no

middleman

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middle man

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therefore

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the

money

is handed over to the individuals who need it.

For example

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over the

last

three months

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two directors of non governmental organizations have been probed by the economic and financial crimes commission because it was observed that while people donate large sums of

money

towards helping the poor

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these men line their pockets with these funds

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giving only a minor fraction to the less privileged.

On the other hand

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refers to the speaker or writer

think that giving monies to charitable organizations is a better way of rendering help because it eliminates bias and ensures fairness in the distribution of resources.

For instance

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people may decide to

give

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give money only to

money

to only those who share

same religious beliefs

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the same religious beliefs

as they do or to only those

from

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a particular ethnic group.

As a result

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many donors may end up providing

support

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for

the same

individual

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individual, therefore

therefore

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while one person receives these benefits

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other less privileged individuals are neglected.

Also

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these organizations ensure that a larger number of persons can be helped.

This

is because they can

recieve

get something; come into possession of

receive

donations and

support

from all over the world and reach out to people not only in their vicinities but

also

in other underdeveloped countries. In conclusion

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while peoples opinion may vary

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with

the choice of whether to offer help and

support

in person or through national and international charitable organizations

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I strongly believe that the latter is better as resources can be fairly distributed amongst underprivileged people and

support

rendered to a much larger group of persons.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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10Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
2Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
31Grammar mistakes
 

4 paragraphs

345 words

5.50

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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