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The street where you live is in poor condition. Write a letter to local City Council in your letter you Explain the situation Explain the likely consequence Describe the change you expect to occur

Dear sir , I am a resident of Goodwill society and writing to show my concerns over the
ever declining
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 standard of the main street in the society. The main street has proudly been a linkage between
city
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the city
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 and main town for years.
However
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past
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the past
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 two
years
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 the situation of the street is deteriorating . There are cracks all over, it is totally overgrown with weeds and accumulated with that leaves and
twings
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twigs
things
 from trees on
the
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it's
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its
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 sides. I am very concerned that the pits on it are major hazards to children and
elderly
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the elderly
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 who can easily have serious accidents.
Moreover
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,as
rainy
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the rainy
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 season is about to
began
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 so there is every possibility that these cracks will be flooded with rainwater, becoming
breeding
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the breeding
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place
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places
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to
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for
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 Malaria causing mosquitoes. With rain, heaps of decaying plants remains can be washed into
draine
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drains
 causing the blockage of
sewerage
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the sewerage
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 system. As a preventive measure, I believe that repair work should be done immediately including filling of all cracks , uprooting of weeds and removal of decaying leaves and
twings
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twigs
things
wings
. I
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hope
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 you find my concern genuine and take immediate corrective action. Thanking you in anticipation.
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Yours
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Your
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Yours
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 sincerely, Meenakshi Kalyan

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