Children today spend a lot of time on social media. What potential problems could it cause and how would they be addressed.

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in history, social media has become more popular among children.

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over activeness of youngsters over social platforms

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Facebook and many more has many detrimental effects on them. The

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following immediately and as a result of what went before

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paragraphs will discuss all possible negative effects along with remedial actions.

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with, socializing platforms are big distractions for school going children. The increase in trends of being YouTubers,

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inspires children they eventually become more active on social sites, in order to gain popularity.

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not only distract them from

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make them over sensitive about their social status on

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of their fan following adolescents sometimes takes irrational steps of sharing their private photographs online

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giving rise to instances of online blackmailing.

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ever increasing trend has given rise to adultery

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. The contents and posts shared often vulgar and have bad effects on a child's psychological development

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, it is evident that networking platforms have many

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effects on young individuals. As a course of remedial action prominent rolls can be played by parents.

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Children

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so parents should keep them under

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, In order to keep close eye on their young offsprings many parents found it

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a better option

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the group

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on which their child is socially active

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, governments should ban online platforms adulterous contents.A Chinese social application 'Tik Tok' has been banned by payment of many countries including India and Bangladesh. With

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social platforms on youngsters can be minimised. To Conclude, being hyper active on networking sites distracts youngster and exposes them to vulgar contents affecting their psychological development by hampering their innocence

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, effective parenting and judicial steps taken by governments ill effects of social platforms can be negated.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

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Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

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Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

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Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

314 words

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Children today spend a lot of time on social media. What potential problems could it cause and how would they be addressed.

Fully explain your ideas

Last week, you visited a local supermarket and you got saticfactory service. Write a letter to the supermarket manager to thank. In your letter: - introduce yourself; - say why you are satisfied; - say thank you and write about your future visits.

In many countries, many people do not have enough money to access the internet. Should governments be responsible for ensuring that everyone can get access to the Internet?

Many believe that the best way to ensure a happier society is to reduce the difference in income earnings between the rich and poor. To what extent do you agree or disagree?