Some people believe that it is a good idea to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world. Others believe that some information is too important or too valuable to be shared freely.

now a days
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, sharing
information
is key to the success of many individuals.
however
, many
people
believe
that is
good to disclose as much
as
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information
as possible by
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scientists,
academic
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and academic
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researhcers
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researchers
.
on the other hand
, some
people
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that they need to be very careful when sharing
information
.
this
essay describes both viewpoints.
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,
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one side of perspective and
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will define the other point of view,
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are
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opposing.
to begin
with, sharing
inforamtion
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information
plays a vital role in research, business and in the academic world.
beacause
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because
, it helps to grow and gives more chances to explore
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their particular field.
for example
, if a student wants to research and
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not have proper guidance
then
the
information
that
are
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provided by the research activities helps them out.
this
gives
chance
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a chance
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to many aspirants who are interested in public
reasearch
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research
in turn helping the
cfoommunity
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community
. on the other side, many
people
believe that some data is too vital to be shared freely.
this
can be agreed
upto
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up to
an extent.
for instance
,
if
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an individual data like date of birth, phone number,
address
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and address
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should be kept safely,
addind
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adding
more security to their data.
furthermore
, in
business
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the business
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world, more replicating the company products which are high in stake at market. their
formaula
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formula
for product and their approach to their business should be secured. in my opinion, general
information
can be shared
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the
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people
,
whereas
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confidential, which
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above needs to be kept safe.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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