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Labour-saving devices such as dishwashers and communication tools such as computers are supposed to make our lives easier. However, some people argue that these devices only make them more difficult. Does modern technology reduce or increase stress?

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Modern technology
has offered
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offers
 life-changing devices to improve our everyday lives. Though some people claim that dishwashers and computers add burden to them rather that being useful to them.
This
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 essay will discuss the if modern technology brought streets or relief to our lives. Dishwashers are of great
help especially
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help, especially
 if you have a lot of dishes to clean. The operation is very simple and straight forward.
For example
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, you had a housewarming party and
its
it is
it's
time
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 to clean up, you just have to place all the dishes
to
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in
into
 the dishwasher and it will do the cleaning for you. While the dish is being wash you can do other chores. Computers make communication easily available at any
time
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 of the day. An email can be sent to anyone and they can get back to you as soon as they receive it. Consider an international company as an example, they need to communicate
to
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with
 their counterparts in other parts of the world through electronic mails rather than the traditional letter mail that will take days, weeks or even months before it gets delivered. Electronic communication has
speed
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sped
 up the
time
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 required to exchange messages between two parties. In summary, dishwashers and computers are examples of modern technology that were invented to ease our daily lives by reducing the
time
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 required to complete the task and
thus
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 reducing the stress.
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