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People’s lives are now surrounded by advertisement. This affects what people consider important and has a negative impact on people’s lives. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Advertisement
 is dominant in people’s daily lives nowadays, with the high frequency of people having to see the same products or services over and over again. Some people think that
this
 phenomenon is negative because it distorts people’s perspective on life. I completely agree with
this
 statement. Admittedly, advertisements have certain benefits to modern lives.
First
 of all, the purpose of a piece of
advertisement
 is to deliver key information
of
Suggestion
about
 a product to the public.
This
 would assist a person in choosing a product, saving both time researching for the right product and potentially, money from overspending.
Secondly
, the advertising industry is getting more creative than ever, incorporating many current social issues in ads. Some people even consider
advertisement
 nowadays as a form of entertainment, especially with commercials in
forms
Suggestion
the forms
 of short movies or music videos.
However
, I believe that the ubiquity of
advertisement
 is distorting people’s perception on what is important in life. Seeing too many pieces of
advertisement
 is thought by many experts to be the cause of excessive consumerism. People are encouraged by these ads to buy and own more stuff than needed. One consequence of
this
 indulgence in buying new things is that people are buying more, they are
also
 throwing out more stuff than ever, causing a burden on the environment. Another consequence of
this
 phenomenon is that it makes younger generations become more superficial and only care about owning whatever’s considered popular. In conclusion,
although
advertisement
 can introduce many benefits to its audience, I still think that the oversaturation of
advertisement
 can bring negative impacts on individuals and society as a whole.
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