Some people believe that to protect local culture, tourism should be banned in some areas whereas others think that change is inevitable and banning tourism will have no benefits. Discuss both sides and gives your opinion.

Some people consider that prohibiting
tourism
in certain areas can keep local
culture
alive while others think
this
is of no use and change is
unavoidabl
incapable of being avoided or prevented
inevitable
. In my opinion, banning
tourism
in certain areas to preserve local
culture
is a wrong move. On the one
hand banning
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hand, banning
tourism
does avoid local
culture
from being
extincted
no longer in existence; lost or especially having died out leaving no living representatives
extinct
.
For
example consider
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example, consider
the tribes living in Amazon forest or in African remote areas.Tour to
such
places are obviously not allowed legally.Today
such
tribes have been successful in preserving their
culture
as they hardly get to meet any outsider.So their
culture
has never been influenced by any
outsiders
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outsider
cultures.
On the other
hand banning
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hand, banning
tourism
causes great loss both for the local
area
and for the tourists.It dwindles the local income as
tourism
can be the source of that
area
's finance.
For
example consider
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example, consider
Goa
,
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,
Innumerable Foreigners and Indians visit Goa almost
everyday
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every day
which brings lots of income for locals and businessmen.Banning
tourism
can
also
lead to unemployment for many local dwellers whose daily wage comes from the tourists. And banning
tourism
to safe places is like wasting nature's gift which is meant to be savoured by all. As some people consider that change is for sure, I don't believe so.Locals can preserve their
culture yet
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culture, yet
allow the tourists to enjoy the beauty of their
area
.
For instance
,
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,
consider Dakshina Kannada's typical cultural dance called Bharatanatyam, where locals exhibit their dance with pride and tourists enjoy it. In fact cultural
pecularity
an odd or unusual characteristic
peculiarity
peculiarities
of an
area
can drive more tourists to visit the place, increasing the local income. In conclusion, banning
tourism
in a particular
area
in order to keep the local
culture
alive has more losses than the
benifits
financial assistance in time of need
benefits
.And change can be avoided despite encouraging
tourism
.
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