Many childhood diseases can now be prevented through the use of vaccines. Should parents be made by law to immunise their children against common diseases or should individuals have the right to choose not to immunise their children? You should use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence.

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several severe medical matters, typical of which is childhood diseases. Whereas, some individuals hold the idea that parents should be forced to immunize their children, the others state that protecting kids' health by using vaccines is

parents' right

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the parents' right

without law involvement. From my perspective, I strongly advocate the latter viewpoint that it is parents' duty that immunizing their

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. More specifically, there is an argument advanced by opponents that children should let a fully well-protected lives from early ages by injections against common disease.

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, according to current research, that point of view proved to be completely wrong because most of childhood diseases can cured with homemade remedies

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going to hospitals. It is expected that parents tend to let their offsprings

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enhance the immunity systems strong enough without in depth medical involvement to prevent later on minor ailments. Opponents

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maintain the idea that children should take vaccines for community goods. Obviously it may provide enormous advantages authorities, but it is quite unequal to parents. Injecting children, particularly infants, for

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good apparently does not take parents as well as offerings rights into serious consideration due to the fact that its central care is merely on making profit for governments.

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, because not all kinds of vaccinations can totally eliminate

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childhood diseases, the belief in medicine of

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are many opposite ideas that parents should be made to protect their kids artificially in terms of unrealistic fully protected lives and community goods, while I firmly believe immunizing children

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to individuals right considering enhancement natural system as well as the effectiveness of vaccination.

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Sentence 3 - Discussion
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Lexical resource: 4.0

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

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