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Some people argue that capital punishment is good for a country. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

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The benefit of death
penatly
the act of punishing
penalty
 in a nation has been a matter of contention for some. Though I do understand that there are some religious concern, I still completely agree with
this
 opinion and in
this
 essay I will state the reasons for my view. The most compelling reason I have is that,
death penalty
Suggestion
the death penalty
 has proven to be an effective deterrent to serious crimes. If a government implements
death penalty
Suggestion
the death penalty
 for major
offenses
a lack of politeness; a failure to show regard for others; wounding the feelings or others
offences
, people will be fearful of
commiting
perform an act, usually with a negative connotation
committing
such
 crime in exchange of their life.
For instance
, if a person has a great anger against someone to the extent that he wanted to kill the other person, he will still be mindful of his violent act as he
know
Suggestion
knows
 the price that he will pay if he will be caught.
As a result
, people
tends
Suggestion
tend
 to do no harm to others which leads to lower crime rate. Another reason is that, the government spending for the prisoners will be lesser. The government is funding the maintenance of the jails, the salary of the officials, and the food of the inmates. Consider how much money can be saved if there will be lesser people being imprisoned.
Furthermore
, the budget that can be saved from
this
 can be allocated to support other ministries.
Lastly
, with capital punishment, the dangerous criminals will no longer be able to pose any threat to the society.
Thus
, making the country a safer place to live in. In summary, I absolutely agree that capital punishment is beneficial for a country. Despite having religious conflicts, I still believe that it is better to lose one life rather than a
hunderd
being ten more than ninety
hundred
 of innocent lives.
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