Countries are becoming more and more similar because people are able to buy the same products anywhere in the world. Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?

Increasing number
Suggestion
An increasing number
of people are able to buy the same products, and
as a result
, countries are becoming more and more similar in a way.
This
has both pros and
cons but
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cons, but
the positive effects outweigh the negative ones. In
this
essay, the positive and negative effects of
such
developments will be discussed. The advantages of the availability of the same products in most of the countries are many and
also
to a large extent. There would be
consistency
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consisted
consist
consistent
among the countries no matter which
nations they
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nations, they
are and how much they have developed, and
as a
result it
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result, it
helps to reduce the discrimination which is solely based on the races of the individuals.
Moreover
, it doesn'
t
matter if the nations are rich or poor, the same products are available, and it depends upon the capability of the individuals to afford the products,
hence
the majority of the people don'
t
have to be ashamed of their nationality in regards of not being able to buy the things they wish even though they could afford them.
Also
don'
t
have to go through the lengths of going to another place which is far away to have an
experiance
the accumulation of knowledge or skill that results from direct participation in events or activities
experience
of using their products or indulging in their food.
For instance
, if someone lives in India, they don'
t
have to go to Mexico to try tacos,
instead
, they can go to a
mexican
a native or inhabitant of Mexico
Mexican
based restaurant in their area.
On the contrary
, there are certain cons regarding
this
situation. If the same products are available in most of the countries, there would be no individuality as far as the nations are concerned,
that is
, there would be almost no products that a country would be popular and known for.
Moreover
, the world would be a less diverse
place
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placed
, without many different items being available in various regions. In conclusion, I believe that though there are both pros and cons, it is a more positive development that the similar items are available almost all the places around the world.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • globalization
  • diversity
  • homogenization
  • cultural assimilation
  • global connection
  • local businesses
  • economic impact
  • consumerism
  • standardization
  • westernization
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