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Modern building change the character and appearance of towns and cities.The government should insist that new buildings be built in traditional styles to protect cultural identity.To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Modernity is one of the characteristic
feature
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features
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 of every developed country.
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, one of the noticeable things that make up
cities
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 and towns of well-developed countries is their
houses
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. I am in complete agreement that new modernized
houses
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 transform the face of every metropolis for the following reasons:
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, it is an undisputed fact that new
houses
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 of different styles and
structure
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structures
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 epitomize the beauty of
cities
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.
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, it attracts tourism. Admittedly,
people
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 tour
cities
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 to sight the quintessential
houses
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 and take pictures therein.
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also
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 boosts the economy of the country as tourists budget a lot of money to be spent in
such
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cities
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. A vivid example of
such
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 a place is United Arab Emirates. In Dubai,
houses
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 are built in different styles and designs. As part of their policies,
houses
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 of ten years old are demolished to erect new ones and
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 commonly
attract
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people
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 into their country.
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, it is a well-known fact that stylishly built
houses
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 create uniqueness. If every building
have
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their
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its
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 own design and structure, it indirectly helps in proper identification.
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, in Victoria Island, Lagos, the way and manner
houses
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 were built in the referenced places help visitors a great deal in easy identification of where they are going
to
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.
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 avoids delays in movement. In the event that Government allow
people
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 to erect
houses
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 having a common design and built in a conventional sense, it will definitely make the place less attractive and boring.
People
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 will find it very uninteresting to visit the said places which will eventually discourage tourism. In conclusion, I am
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 of the firm view that
Government
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the Government
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 should ensure that
houses
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 are built using different designs for uniqueness and to make various towns beautiful.
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 will create a beautiful city and enhance tourism.

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Make sure to clearly state your opinion in the introduction and keep it clear throughout.
coherence and cohesion
Use simple connecting words to help ideas flow smoothly from one to the next.
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Try to explain examples in a clearer way to help the reader understand what you mean.
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You provided relevant examples to support your points, which strengthens your argument.
coherence and cohesion
The introduction and conclusion are present and summarize your main ideas well.
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