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A growing number of people feel that animals should not be exploited by people and that they should have the same right as humans, while others argue that humans must employ animals to satisfy their various needs, including uses for food and research.

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Some people support the opinion that indiscriminate
use
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 of animals by human should be stopped and
animals
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the animals
 should have an equal right as humans do. Whereas others believe that animals could be used by
man
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 in whatever way they desire. In my view, the misuse of animals by
man
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 should be prohibited.
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 it is believed by
some that animals
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some animals that
 could be used by human the way they want to satisfy their needs.
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, the
use
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 of animals in the field of science
for
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of
 experiment, for research purpose and for the purpose of testing out new drugs to know the effect it will have on people. Though, the intentions are right but uncontrolled
use
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 should be minimized since
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animals
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animal
 can feel pain as humans do when they are
been
the state or fact of existing
being
 mishandled.
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, some believe that inappropriate
use
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 of animals by
man
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 should be abolished and I agree with
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 opinion because animals have the right to life as humans do.
Also
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improper
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the improper use
use
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 of animal can lead to figure extinction of some certain species that are beneficial to
man
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. Animals
also
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 feel pain when they are not well handled. The nutrient that
are gotten
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is gotten
is got
 from the animals can
also
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 be derived from various plants and
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 can serve as an alternative source of nutrient.
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, having to kill animals for food is not a sufficient reason. To sum up,
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 some argue that killing animals for food and research is ethical, I believe that indiscriminate killing of animals is unethical and as
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 should be stopped.
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