In some countries young people are encouraged to work or travel for a year between finishing high school and starting university studies. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages for young people who decided to do this. Give reason for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Some of young students now are encouraged to join some work or going to an occasion for a year in between

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the end

of their schooling and beginning of university studies. In my

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opinion, this

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is leads to get lacking in their studies and some of them are loosing interest

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farther

to or at a greater extent or degree or a more advanced stage ('further' is used more often than 'farther' in this abstract sense)

further

education. I think many of the students are continuing the

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college

college's

life

after completing school that saving their

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due to that.

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Every

student wants to do the same since they don't get deviate in other activities. More than that they will complete their desired course at

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the right time

time

and can do work on that easily. And they can reach their goals

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perfect

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. I want to share one person experience which I have seen, one of younger cousin immediately started his college after school with

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the perfect future plan

a perfect future plan

perfect future plans

he was already decided what course want to study and which

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he like to do everything with

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a perfect plan

by the end his dreams come true. In other

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students are having long trip more over, few of them doing

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the person

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jobs

are just permitted to that level. Having a graduation degree

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is very important in everyone's life also given

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is very important in everyone's life also give

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give more respect in society. Some teenagers are addicted to travelling these

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days, but

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it's all a waste

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. Having fun in

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some limits for it, if extended to peak it goes wrong.

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, they loose concentration on studies. I have seen one of my schoolmate he is very rich in money that made him irresponsible, after completing our schooling we all started

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a long trip to different places after 1 year his parents asked him to join in University for Higher education but he just said I'm not interested in studies rather than I will do business. But now he is not doing any business or work. I conclude that taking long break after schooling makes some students lazy and their thoughts go beyond study because in that age we don't know what is

life

so parents want to guide them.

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Finally, continuing

farther

to or at a greater extent or degree or a more advanced stage ('further' is used more often than 'farther' in this abstract sense)

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studies without long break makes

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a person

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the right time

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