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Should governments make decisions about people's lifestyle, or should people make their own decisions?

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Nowadays, diversity is a major trend, people generally have multiple lifestyles.
However
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, there
is
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are
 some people argue that the way people live should be guided by the governments. I strongly disagree with the view, if governments take steps to control people’s life, the privacy will be invaded and people’s life will be
standardize
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standardized
 as one kind. One of the remarkable factor is regulations.
Although
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 I believe that governments sure have the right to censor the content in the media for security issues, liberty is the reason why art and
culture
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 become a prominent power. If there is too much
regulations
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regulation
 and censorships, the whole industry will be influenced. Taking North Korea for an example,
this
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 nation is famous for the government’s over-control policy, the
culture
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 and creative industry
is nearly
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are, nearly
are nearly
 underdeveloped, because the government does not allow people to run business freely and support the non-government media industry.
On the other hand
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, our society
consist
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consists
 of various of
culture
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, race, and ethnic. In terms of different cultural background, diversity
to
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of
country
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the country
 is increasingly important. Government
don’t have
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doesn’t have
 the necessary to lead the way how people live. In California, even gay people can get
marry
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married
. Certainly, governments do need to deal with some harmful situations
such
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 as drugs and crimes, but apart from that, it is better to let people decide by themselves. In conclusion, different lifestyle makes the society more creative, open and integrated. Regulations from governments will
effect
have an effect upon
affect
 the diversity of
country’s
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the country’s culture
a country’s culture
culture
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 and the creativity of people’s mind.
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