Nowadays, technology is increasingly being used to monitor what people are saying and doing. In many cases, the people being monitored are unaware that this is happening. Do you think the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?

These days, people are being monitored, regarding their actions, through current technology now, at greater rates than in the past, and
moreover
, the majority of the time, they are unaware of
this
situation. Though there are considerable number of disadvantages as it is not consented, the advantages outweigh them as it helps to catch juveniles. In
this
essay, the pros and cons of monitoring people will be discussed. By monitoring people without their knowledge, for most of the times, their secrets can be uncovered. By using
this
tactic, it might help the police departments to catch criminals, no matter how small or big the crime that they have
commited
bound or obligated, as under a pledge to a particular cause, action, or attitude
committed
is.
For instance
, there a lot of cases where murderers have been caught by studying the cameras in stores, hotels or other places. Not only
that but
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that, but
after catching the criminals, to put them in jail, these video or audio recordings might be used as a solid evidence.
Furthermore
, the general public is being more careful with their actions, as they might not take the risk of going to jail for breaking simple rules.
For example
, as there is a camera present at almost all of the major crossings, people are not daring to cross the red light as much as they did back in the day.
On the contrary
, there can be many disadvantages too. If the criminals are smart enough, they might use
this
to their advantage, by using the technology to commit their crimes.
For example
, if there is a stalker, the technology might make their stalking of their victim much simpler. If information about individuals are recorded, without their consent, the masses might lose trust in people in general and
also
might go into depression or become insecure.
For instance
, the social media
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platform
, Twitter has been outed for recording information about the ones on that platform, most of them being innocent people. In conclusion, though the cons of monitoring people might be extreme and might be traumatising for the innocent individuals, the pros outweigh them as
this
could be used to catch and punish the criminals.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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