Do children behave better when they are physically punished or rewarded?

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It is often argued that youngsters should be punished, when they misbehave or do mischief things. I am totally against punishing young people. I would like to elaborate more going
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To begin
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with, Young people with their growing minds were like mirrors. They reflect our own images upon them. They learn things and actions from their parents, near and dear and from their surroundings too. Of course, they grab good things along with
bad stuff
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the bad stuff
. So,
it
it is
it's
our responsibility to identify the wrong things in them and to guide them to follow
right way
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the right way
. With our actions, how well we treat them, becomes a measure to them, how well they transform.
For Example
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, Toddlers have
tendency
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tended
to put their thumb in their mouths. We must train them, to not to put again
instead
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of physically harassing them.
Furthermore
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, I completely accept the
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statement given that, young behave well when rewarded. Everyone of us likes Pride and so are Children. They become happy when someone
treat
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treats
them
good
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well
better
.
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, when a child gets an award for their excellence in Academics or for doing good in Sports. They feel it as proud moment and continue to strive hard to reach that position and moment every time, and
thus
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it becomes a practise. To Conclude, in my opinion, Young minds should be awarded rather than just physically punishing them, as it may deviate their young in
wrong direction
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the wrong direction
and
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leads to an immature civilian. As someone said, Todays Young People were tomorrows Citizens.
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