Some people think that In order to solve traffic and transportation problems people should be encouraged to live in cities rather than in suburbs or in the countryside. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Efficient transportation
system
is difficult to manage in
majority
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the majority
of the nations. Many individuals believe that boosting residence in
city
areas
instead
of rural regions can solve the difficulties of
traffic
and conveyance
system
. I am of the opinion, that gathering all the people to urban regions will make the problem more complex,
therefore
I completely disagree with the idea to bring people in cities
Firstly
,
although
the cities have
better transportation
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a better transportation system
system
as
compare
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compared
with rural transport, but allotting all the people to one place will make the
city
more crowded and difficult to move. Merging of
city
and rural people will make it difficult to move the
traffic
as with the addition of individuals, the
number
of vehicles will be
increase
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increased
especially in terms of personal conveyance.
Hence
, making more
traffic
jams mainly during office hours.
For instance
, the admission of villagers in
Delhi metro
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the Delhi metro system
system
has made the commuter over-crowded and congested.
Secondly
, poor quality life, accommodating all the people together greater the risk of accidents. Chaos to manage
such
complex
traffic
management results the potential
to
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for
higher accidental risk, to overcome
such
impacts government needs to
increase
number
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the number
of routes for daily commuting and
increase
the
traffic
controls by implanting more signals,
thus
resulting more complex
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resulting in more complex
structures and chance of failures.
For instance
, metro cities
has often recorded
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have often recorded
with higher
number
of
incidence
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incidences
.
However with
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However, with
the addition of people from
village
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villages
the village
will simply make the situation worsen. In conclusion, merging of
city
and rural people will make it over crowded
city
highways and the problems of
traffic
will enhance because of
increase
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the increase
an increase
in
number
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the number
of vehicles on
road
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the road
.
Thus
hampering the
traffic
control
system
.
Therefore I
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Therefore, I
believe we should try to develop village sectors
instead
of coupling villagers with urban citizens.
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