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In many developed countries, fast food is cheap and widely available. Many people tend to choose unhealthy option. what can governments do to solve this problem.

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It is believed that the majority of the people nowadays prefer to eat unhealthy
food
. In
this
 essay, will be
analyzed
examined carefully and methodically; broken down for consideration of constituent parts
analysed
 and
further
 suggestions will be discussed. One of the significant factors is the low cost of the junk
food
. Most of the fast
food
 restaurants minimize the price of junk
food
,
this
 is a smart idea to attract customers to buy more
food
.
For instance
, while I was
studied
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studying
 in
United States
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the United States
 of America, there were vast advertising and discount that junk
food
 restaurants created.
Thus
,
student
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the student
a student
 was chasing the promotion to manage their limited budgets. Another major factor is the high number of the fast
food
 restaurants in one single city.
For example
, in
flagstaff
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Flagstaff
 in Arizona
state there
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state, there
 are several fast foods
compare
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compared
comparable
 to its area and population.
Moreover
, companies offer many branches on campus because they want to expand and cover all the buildings. It is true
that is
 the responsibility of the government to follow these companies.
My
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 suggest is that the government should increase the taxes for the fast
food
.
Also
, the government needs to limit and
decline the
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decline, the
 number of fast
food
 restaurant. To conclude, people admire to eat fast
food
 due to the time taken to prepare a male.
Therefore
, they can save more time,
Also
, there are
huge number
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huge numbers
a huge number
 of fast
food
 restaurants;
thus
, people can see it and reach it easily. The modern countries should be prohibited some of the fast
food
 restaurants in their cities because they need to save their citizens from any medical and health issues.
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