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Nowadays we are producing more and more rubbish. Why do you think this is happening? What can governments do to help reduce the amount of rubbish produced?

#rubbish #governments #amount
Nowadays, Waste
have been produced
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has been producing
has been produced
 a lot, due to
increase
 of standards of living and
increase
 in technology. Due to technical growth manufacturing of products
increase
 a lot, which may be
good sign
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a good sign
good signs
, along with useless products.
Firstly
, Considering the standard of living, People living style
have improved
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has improved
 a lot over the few decades, when compared to
past
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the past
.
This
 made them to spend more money on products. In order to
increase
 the demand companies tend to manufacture more goods, which in turn contributed to
production
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the production
 of wastage.
For example
, Consumption of soft drinks in
plastic tins
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plastic, tins
 increased in recent days, which in turn
increase
 the rubbish production.
Secondly
, Technology growth
contribute
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contributes
 more to the point.
Increase
 of research activities outcome varies products which
increases
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increase
 the wastage
increase
.
For example
,
manufacture
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the manufacture
 of polythene carry bags is the key.
Availablity
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Availability
 in price and quantity made the consumption these products more and contributed key role in the
increase
 of
rubibish
worthless material that is to be disposed of
rubbish
. These cannot be recycled and at the same time cannot be
aviodable
that you have the financial means for
affordable
avoidable
.
Goverment
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Government
 should take
neccessary
absolutely essential
necessary
 action to reduce the consumption of these.
This
 can be done in two
ways either
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ways, either
 impose or
increase
 the tax amount on these
usage
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usages
 or create an awareness to the people regarding the effects of usage. In conclusion, not only the
goverment
the organization that is the governing authority of a political unit
government
 but
also end
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has also ended
 users should contribute for healthy environment.
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