With the recent development in technology like e-books some people feel that the printed media like books, newspaper and magazines will soon be a thing of the past. Others feel that these forms of media will never disappear What's your opinion?

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Nowadays, by developing technology
such
as online reading, several
people
, including me, believe that printed
media
like
books
, newspapers and
magazines
will experience demand declining.
However
, it is argued that
books
and tabloids have been used constantly forever.
Firstly
, I concede that paper
books
and printed
media
could flourish the sense of nostalgia. Certain
people
have experienced the smell of
books
or touched them.
However
, the problem is that paper tabloids and
books
do not seem to
environmentally
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friendly. Obviously, papers needed for
books
and
magazines
are provided by trees. Several trees must be cut to produce paper. I think
,
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e-
books
can prevent the cutting of trees and
also
, help to increase the number of forests.
Secondly
, printed
media
are said to be used permanently since they are far easier to use , especially for elderly
people
.
However
, I think digital
books
or
magazines
are rather accessible and
also
, relatively cheaper than printed ones.
Moreover
, Thanks to technology growth, I think, it is foreseeable that old
people
will learn how to use electronic
media
due to
its convenient area and lower price.
For example
, by surfing the internet, the vast majority of information and news can be accessed via smartphones at a low cost which would not be possible with printed
magazines
as they should be bought and paid some extra money. All being said,
although
it is argued that despite developing technology in introducing e-
books
, they will never
have vanished
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from society, I wholeheartedly believe that printed
media
will be expected to be entirely replaced with electronic
media
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • E-books
  • Digital formats
  • Portability
  • Accessible
  • Digital infrastructure
  • Environmentally sustainable
  • Tactile appeal
  • Nostalgic experience
  • Audiobooks
  • Distraction-free
  • Sentimental value
  • Educational purposes
  • Annotation
  • Consumer preference
  • Declining demand
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