Using a computer every day can have more negative than positive effects on your children. Do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays, children

spends

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spend

most of their time on electronic gadgets especially computers. It's not

welcome sign

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a welcome sign

for the future of the

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generation. Apart from

advantages

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the advantages

, what it posses, it has

it's

of a thing, of it; possessive form of "it"

its

own disadvantages.

Firstly

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, Losing reality, kids often spend with gadgets will be

spend

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spending

their life time far from reality. They tend to use them as play stations, not effects them visually but

also

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physically.

For example

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, those who play outdoor games are often

more stronger

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stronger

and fit when compared to one who play these games.

This

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may lead to

obsity

more than average fatness

obesity

Secondly

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, Football, Volleyball

etc

continuing in the same way

etc.

are

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the games that make to interact with

other

any of various alternatives; some other

another

kid, which make them to learn a lot many new things. Recent study states that one who is physically fit have more chances of

sucess

an event that accomplishes its intended purpose

success

than the other. They are going to have better communication and can analyse the situation

accordingly

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. To have

this

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capability we need to interact with various

type

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types

of people. So parent

need

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needs

to make their children to spend

atleast

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at least

couple of hours for playing outdoor games

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, visual damage, those who spend mostly on laptop will tend to get visual related problems, that too high in teenagers and below. The changes of decrease in vision

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are

too high when compared to normal conditions. Addiction

may led

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may lead

to side effects. In conclusion, Computers are

source

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sources

a source

of information, too much spending of time on the same may lead to various health hazards.

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
0
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Grammar mistakes
detected issues

<4

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

5.5

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

5 paragraphs

240 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

Screen time
Sedentary lifestyle
Physical inactivity
Cognitive development
Internet addiction
Cyberbullying
Inappropriate content
Digital literacy
Virtual learning environments
Parental controls
Moderation
Online safety
Tech-savvy
E-learning
Information technology
Eye strain
Social skills
Multitasking
Interactive education
Health repercussions

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Using a computer every day can have more negative than positive effects on your children. Do you agree or disagree?

Fully explain your ideas

Banking and payment methods. The role of banks in the modern world. Large banks and their work. Working with clients.

The average standard of people's health is likely to be lower in the future than it is now. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Some people believe that professionals, such as doctors and engineers, should be required to work in the country where they did their training. Others believe they should be free to work in another country if they wish. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.