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It is becoming more and more difficult to escape the influence of the media on our lives. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of living in a media-rich society.

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Media nowadays plays an important role in every
persons
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person's
 life. People depend on newspapers and channels to know what is going on around them. In the modern era broadcasting industry is more powerful than any other sectors, because it is directly connected to each and every
mans
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man
 daily routine despite gender, age
,
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,
 social status and wealth. There are some advantages and as well as disadvantages in being part of
this
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 media rich culture. On the one hand,
this
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 media influence is some way beneficial to the society especially in democratic countries. Because it ensures transparency in the system. As we all know, many of the nation's system
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is
 corrupt to a certain level. It is the media who
usually brings
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usually bring
 out
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 malpractices to the public and help to reduce
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 incidents.
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, if we take the example of
3G spectrum scam
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the 3G spectrum scam
 that happened in
India few years ago
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India a few years ago
, it was one
channels
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channel's
channel
 sting operation that
shed
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sheds
 light on
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 issue and triggered mass
outrange
a feeling of righteous anger
outrage
 in India.
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, these TV's and newspapers are helpful in passing important information to the public in a
quickest
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quick
quicker
 manner, Like warning about natural disasters or accidents as
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.
On the other hand
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, the same media can act as a two side sword, when it comes to some controversial matters. These people can mislead the public and create panic among them easily. At present people believe almost everything floating in
media
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the media
, because there isn't any systems prevails to ensure the
genuinity
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 of the news.
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,
majority
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the majority
 of the media houses are biased they broadcast
news according
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news, according
 to their interest and preference. On top of that, these so called media people are misusing their power by invading the personal space of people. They are pointing their cameras to each and everything without considering a person's privacy. To recapitulate, the extensive presence of
media
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the media
 is helpful
for
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to
 the society to a some extent, but at the same time certain restrictions are required to control its misuse of accessibility.
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Otherwise these
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Otherwise, these
 media should follow some ethics and code of conduct when they are reporting on something.
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