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Nowadays, food is become easier to prepare. How this change improved the way people live?

Most people would argue that today, preparing
food
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 is simpler than it was in the past. I think
this
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 has enhanced people’s lifestyle. Undoubtedly, modern appliances which play an important role in making
food
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easier consume
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easier to consume
 electricity.
For instance
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, my family has noticed a dramatic rise in
electricity bill amount
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the electricity bill amount
, by 2000 rupees, after starting the
usage
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use
 of the microwave and electric stove in
food
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 making.
This
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 means anyone, whose with low monthly income is very low
such
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 as 10000 rupees, cannot afford to pay 30% of his salary to electricity bill in
this
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 fast-growing expensive lifestyle.
where
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Where
 he has to manage other expenditure of daily household. In short, some people may not be able to improve their lives by adopting easier
food
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 making strategies.
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, contemporary methods of
food
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 preparation
has improved
Suggestion
have improved
 our
livesfe
a characteristic state or mode of living
lives
 in many ways.
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, quick
food
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 preparation means
savinge
an act of economizing; reduction in cost
saving
 huge amount of
time
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. My wife and I both work for at least 10 hours a day. Now if she cooks without modern appliances, she will spend more
time
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 in the kitchen only, and cannot give much attention to other activities.
On the other hand
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, with the help of modern cooking methods, she prepares breakfast like scrambled eggs in just a minute in the microwave.
This
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 has helped both of us in maintaining our work-life balance.
Furthermore
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, citizen’s health has
also
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 improved with today’s
food
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 making techniques. When it used to take longer was lengthier to prepare
food
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, most people who lived far from their homes
prefered
more desirable than another
preferred
 to eat outside
food
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.
This
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meants
how a result is obtained or an end is achieved
means
meant
 eating in low quality
food
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 and with fewer nutrients.
This
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 has resulted in many dangerous diseases,
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 as
food
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 poisoning and stomach cancer.
However
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, today anybody can bake
food
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 anywhere.
For instance
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, I prepare my evening snacks in
office’s microwave
Suggestion
the office’s microwave
.
Moreover
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, during my college
time
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, my roommates and I were using
electric-stove
Suggestion
an electric - stove
 to make most of the
food
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, like noodles and, bread, and so on in
ourt
of or belonging to us
our
our t
youth
 hostel-room. In conclusion, it is clear that nowadays cooking has become very easy and
this
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 has ameliorated human’s people's living standards by saving their vital
time
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 and improving their health.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Modern appliances
  • Pre-packaged meals
  • Cooking time
  • Nutritional value
  • Public health
  • Work-life balance
  • Cultural heritage
  • Food industry
  • Processed foods
  • Packaging waste
  • Social bonding
  • Culinary skills
  • International cuisine
  • Preservatives
  • Additives
  • Contamination
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