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Some of the methods used in advertising are unethical and unacceptable in today’s society. To what extent do you agree with this view?

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In recent times, advertising is becoming increasingly popular. Some people believe that the ways commercials are aired immorally and unacceptable in society. I completely agree with
this
 view because many adverts contain inappropriate scenes, and
this
 could affect the younger generation negatively. Many commercial display inappropriate pictures. They incorporate beautiful models that are dressed in their underwear to persuade their customers. It is unethical because the
product
 advertised do not have any relationship with the models. It does not give extra
information
 about the
product
. They are placed there to appeal to the customers and bring more attention to the advert.
For example
, in a Mazda car advert, two ladies were dressed in their underwear while washing the car. It is unacceptable because it does not give extra
details but
Accept comma addition
details, but
 to seduce the viewers. Adverts like
this
 should be rejected due to inappropriate content.
Furthermore
, many adverts contain false
information
. They give the viewers unrealistic expectations. It could
also
 mean deliberately omitting relevant details so that people are not discouraged from buying it.
For instance
, many weight loss products advertised do not work as expected. It usually takes longer than expected before a significant effect is noticed on the weight, so they would either remove that
information
 and focus on the results. They do
this
 because many people are more interested in the outcome, and they only inquire more details when they have started using the
product
. In conclusion, some people think that the methods employed in adverts nowadays are unethical and inappropriate. I believe some contain immoral scenes and give wrong or incomplete
information
 about the
product
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Unethical
  • Unacceptable
  • Deceptive
  • Exaggerated
  • Misleading
  • Manipulation
  • Vulnerable
  • Targeted advertising
  • Perpetuation
  • Societal norms
  • Stereotypes
  • Negative body image
  • Intrusion of privacy
  • Data-driven
  • Over-saturation
  • Desensitization
  • Annoyance
  • Greenwashing
  • Eco-conscious
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