Very few people who commit crime want to. They do it because they feel they have no choice. This is the reality of the situation, and it means that police and prisons are not relevant to reducing crime. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Crime rate
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The crime rate
has been increasing very significantly day-by-day, which, in turn, has many reasons and
this
is due to which the criminals are left with no other choice.
This
is not only creating
lot
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lots
of mess in the
society but
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society, but
also
a confusion in the legal departments, about how to resolve the cases. Government has to take many wise decisions, intellectual plans to catch the culprits in a unique way, maintaining high secrecy standards regarding the sketch of chasing methods. Many-a-times, even the law
also
lifts up the hands as they are left with no solutions and ends up
such
cases in suspense or postponements. Crimes are of many types like theft, racket, murder, harassment, psycho-killing,
etc
continuing in the same way
etc.
, which are committed
horroneously
in a mistaken manner
erroneously
. It is scientifically proved that brutality is a result of the psychological disturbance that occurs in a
person
, due to enormous reasons. When a
person
is utmost frustrated towards some thing or some one, that perversion leads to evil behaviour called REVENGE. Perhaps,
this
is the hazardous situation for both the
person
who went under
this
condition and
also
to the people or
society
, that are
asscociated
make a logical or causal connection
associated
with him. On the flip side, the other reason for
such
deadly attitude is due to the transgression like selfishness, free or sudden money,
lazyness
inactivity resulting from a dislike of work
laziness
, and many more. Once
such
thoughts of destroying, inculcates into a human brain, it gets deeply penetrated
unto
expresses motion to a point on, or within, something
into
onto
the roots, rather would not leave the
person
till
such
achievement. They need not
necesarily
in such a manner as could not be otherwise
necessarily
be mentally imbalanced, in fact, are stubborn in all the ways, straight forward and smart working people can
also
be a part of
this
channel. Terrorism, starving for human blood, haunted thoughts of perishing a place or a group of people,
likewise
,
are
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is
the most dangerous crimes that are under judicial custodies.
Exemplery
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Exemplary
is the recent bomb blast case in Churches in Sri Lanka, a massive terror attack by the suicidal bombers. Team members who participated
are
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were
most of them educated and well reputed, holding the highest cadre in the
society
. But all these are
invain
Suggestion
in vain
, cause they are mentally very much diverted, hearts diluted and were driven in inaccurate destination, despite, their goal being smashing of the Nation. It is an agreed
upfront
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up front
that the prisons, the law, the judgement sentenced to
such
hard core
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hardcore
, cold blooded criminals, are neither relevant nor sufficient, so as to reduce the cases. Soothing the
society
should take place from the inner consciousness of each and every individual in the World, bearing the responsibility that they have. Alternatively, the government
also
has to arrange adequate resources, that are essential for upcoming generations to act
wise
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wisely
, at times.
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