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A healthy person is often described as someone who has a good diet, gets plenty of exercise and avoids stress. What should people do to stay healthy in your country?

#person #someone #diet #plenty #exercise #stress #people #country
Healthy person
Suggestion
A healthy person
 is generally known for his good diet, plenty of exercise and avoid stress. Not only the mentioned points need to be
considered but
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considered, but
also
 we should keep proper sleep
also
 in mind. Let discuss regarding the same in following. Let discuss in detail, regarding the
food
 habits.
Its
Suggestion
It
 plays an important role in our daily life. Not only consuming
appropiate
suitable for a particular person or place or condition etc
appropriate
food but
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food, but
also
 at
right time
Suggestion
the right time
 make us far from diseases. We have to make sure regarding
food
Suggestion
the food
 we consume
doent
do not
don't
doesn't
dint
 have any
ingredians
a component of a mixture or compound
ingredients
 which causes digestion problem. Apart from
food
Suggestion
the food
 we need to
workout
Suggestion
work out
a
expresses position, direction or location, or point in time
at
 regular intervals like walking, which helps us to have better digestive system functionality. Psychological pressure plays an important role in each and
everyone
Suggestion
everyone's
 life. It not only
effect
have an effect upon
affect
 our
work but
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work, but
also
 well being of the body. According to
recent survey
Suggestion
a recent survey
recent surveys
,
person
Suggestion
a person
 who is mentally strong and far from tension's tend to achieve more than others. In
this
 situation, the best example is Arnold S.
who
Suggestion
Who
 have achieved world class reputation, with his
physicall
involving the body as distinguished from the mind or spirit
physical
physically
physician
 attire.
Comming
Suggestion
Coming
 to my country, I am from developing country, most of the
people
Suggestion
person's
 occupation will be either farming or industrial work. These sectors includes
lot
Suggestion
lots
 of physical work, so they tend to consume
helathy
having or indicating good health in body or mind; free from infirmity or disease
healthy
food
 which is mixture of carbohydrates, fat and vitamins. So most of them usually use to fit and for the remaining they need to do some workouts in order to make them fit. In Conclusion, Not only taking care of above discussed
point but
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point, but
 if we consider the proper
sleep
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sleep, then
then
 life will be awesome by far from diseases.
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